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Oklainis Extract pg55-57Silence bursts. There is only the far sound of the squeaky door and of the cars travelling at the town-centre. The violin is at the neck of the violinist and the bow is on the strings. The fingers are placed and create the first chords
Calm replaces the silence... Magic escapes from the bow's friction on the strings; the first chord is launched, slowly, giving the tone to the music, to the atmosphere which creates under our eyes, under our ears
I only can listen to, I only can be amazed by this starting lyric melody. It reverbs on the stone walls, giving them some color, giving them life, diffusing some lives and sprinkling hope. The music intensifies in the seconds which seems to be infinite, eternals. The pure-hearted artist's fingers glide and vibrate on the strings. All is beauty, marvel and enchantment. Nothing can perturb this moment. The bad guys stay there, listening to these magical, prodigious and unnatural sounds. Music plays with our senses. It transports us in
Oklainis ExtractOklainisWhat would you do to save your dreams ?A ground appears below me, welcoming and warm. I'm looking at it, getting closer to this little grain of sand I represent in this space, this infinite space. I crush.Dust ascends around me. I clean my eyes: tears of pain want to flow but just can't. A feminine shadow advances, slowly, graceful. With her hand, she touches my chin and raises my head. I don't have any pain left. No pain
I look at her. Her face is shadowed by the sunset. The sun is crystalline and surrounded by a few clouds, crystalline too, like if they were composed of glass particles. I'm looking at this enchanting landscape which opens to me. She caresses my face. Mildly, she blinks her purple eyes. Then, removing her hand, she takes a step back. She seems to be observing me, delighted to see me in this world which is certainly hers.Dust starts to dissipate and the Sun disappears behind the skyline. The girl's face that is in front of me starts to appe